Tears and Rain

[Keaolien]

{Verse 1}
The stars shine bright
in your eyes
and everything seems right.
This is the moment that I live for
lost in this place
until you whisper in my ear
"this has to end...
I want, no I need more..."

{Chorus}
And then the rain starts to fall
washing away this life
drowning one and all.
Tears mixed with rain
falling from my eyes
washing away all my pain
Will the waves ever break
let me catch my breath
and cleanse my mistake...

{Verse 2}
I stand here alone
on the very same spot
where you left on your own.
How did it ever come to this
bittersweet memories
sealed with that last fatal kiss.
You ghost roams my mind
faded memories of our lives
searching for that peace I'll never find...

{Chorus}
And then the rain starts to fall
washing away this life
drowning one and all.
Tears mixed with rain
falling from my eyes
washing away all my pain
Will the waves ever break
let me catch my breath
and cleanse my mistake...

{Bridge}
The storm moves by
and the sun rises up
in a crystal blue sky.
This isn't the end
on my own now
my only friend...
This isn't the end...
this isn't the end...
THIS ISN'T THE...END!!!!

{Chorus}
And then the rain starts to fall
washing away this life
drowning one and all.
Tears mixed with rain
falling from my eyes
washing away all my pain
Will the waves ever break
let me catch my breath
and cleanse my mistake... x2

[Ciarin]

very sad :(

[Keaolien]

Y'knw peoples, the point of me and others posting this stuff is for some input lol. :P

[Korkskrew]

Critique me and I'll critique you ;)

Edit: It also might help to post the meter and rythym of this piece.

[Keaolien]

it would, but I haven't laid one down one. Waiting to get together with my old band, lay down the music to it. I just write the lyrics, we all decide on rythym and pace together ;)

[Raya]

This is a very poignant poem/song. It is very obvious to me that you have experienced this pain. I have too and I related to every word you wrote. I would like to hear it to music.